persuasive writing

the WALT of this task was write a piece of persuasive writing to convince someone to my o pinyin

Did you know that we are harvesting too much of the world?
most of You might think that it's fine well it”s not its hurting
the world because the earth is not that big compared to
other planets like Saturn. all the tree’s we need to replant
we need to figure out a way to make more resources and
stop polluting that's killing seagulls and fish we need to stop!
We will end up like the dinosaurs soon

Most of our resources will be gone because we are using
too much of our world and lots of things will be gone like
trees.You need to STOP the environments are going to be
gone. We will only have buildings left the earth will have
nothing but only homes unless we all give it a break or
build something that makes stone and resources for us
and the world to live a long life it'll take until the sun blows
up if it does for us to live if we stop this will all happen
because of us harvesting too much of the world and
we need to wait for new islands to grow in millions of years

This is why we need to stop polluting and gather
less resources from the earth! So you can think about
it and i hope you agree

Persuasive Writing Success Criteria

Introduction

• Opening question
• Opinion/Reason

3 Reasons

• Each paragraph is one idea supported with your reasons/facts

Conclusion

• This ties back/recaps back to the introduction

Highlight evidence of linking words.

OMG this is SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO good i can not believe
that you did that you have passed every test

Thanks lockie:)

Thanks lockie amazing i guess i'm good at this and so are you because great feedback and your work as well but you have not highlighted the linking words that's one that you could work on :) and everything else is amazing  with the marking perfect so thumbs up to you